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Which one works best, and why, I wonder.
Or are they both rubbish.
I know the classic haiku don't have comparisons.
But....
Written for a prompt at CarpeDiem
Thursday, January 29
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Which one works best, and why, I wonder.
Or are they both rubbish.
I know the classic haiku don't have comparisons.
But....
Written for a prompt at CarpeDiem
4 comments:
The first hits quick and causes one to ponder - but the second creeps up slowly then pounces on the reader. At first thought first was best, but really, the second works wonderfully and is a very powerful haiku indeed.
Thank you Hamish.
Your comments are poetry in themselves. They make me keep on writing these lines.
How's about you prompting us another of your inspiring haibuns?
Lovely!
I'd agree with Hamish ... the second haiku is the better it leaves one pondering. Both have their merits and beauty though. Bastet
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